Stuck

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I stared at the sky
my mind flew high to the moon
stuck among the star light









*Note:
Haiku is a poem of 17 syllables divided in three lines: (5-7-5).
First line consists of 5 syllables, second line 7 syllables, last line 5 syllables.

--contributed to dversepoets.

6 comments:

Heaven | July 28, 2011 at 7:30 AM

i like it~

Beachanny | July 28, 2011 at 9:51 AM

I like it too. However, strictly your third line has 6 syllables, not five. I do think the poem turns on that line though with "stuck". The difficult thing in haiku is to make that turn; not so much the strictness of the syllable count. The haiku masters made the nature images work as symbols for man's condition and for insights into that condition. Very pleased you linked today. Thank you.

Brian Miller | July 28, 2011 at 10:23 AM

nice..i often get lost among the stars when i gave into their depth...

Neni | July 28, 2011 at 11:58 AM

Heaven and Brian Miller: Thanks...:)

Beachanny: Thank you for your comment. I do appreciate it. And the fact you stated about Haiku gives me more knowledge to this kind of poem new to me... :)

Uneven Stephen | July 29, 2011 at 11:26 PM

Nice haiku.

thelaughinghousewife | July 30, 2011 at 5:35 PM

Lovely haiku.

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