About Lena and Wealthy Widower

This is a story about Lena
a poor girl who married a rich widower
the widower she did not love
for the will of her parents she could not reproach
in order to pay family debts

Wealthy widower had two children
When he was working, Lena would take care of them
On the fifth day, all servants were fired;
Lena said she could do it all:
taking care kids, home and everything

Increasingly, wealthy widower was in love
he thought he did not miscast a second wife
he always found his home was clean and neat, children are in a good care
though Lena was always fatigue and slept fast at night

It was three months the age of their marriage
wealthy widower somehow began to feel
he did not marry a second wife
but rather a housekeeper ...

*Linked in PurpleTreeHouse

Written in session of Reading Lights Writers' Circle (Saturday, 2 / 7), theme: Poverty as a lifestyle.
(The original piece was formerly written in Indonesian Language)


The Cello Strings | August 6, 2011 at 11:51 PM

what a tickle.
Thanks for sharing.

oldegg | August 8, 2011 at 6:03 PM

A sad but ambiguous piece. I was a little confused with your use of the word "miscast".

Lena clearly is a great benefit for him, his children and his home by being a good housekeeper. He however must learn to love and respect her!

Neni | August 8, 2011 at 7:27 PM

I think it's about my poor English... :(
I'm thinking that I need to edit some words especially last two lines

The widower, however, tried to find a wife but Lena acted more as a housekeeper...

Thanks for stopping by and always giving me constructive comments... :)

Marbles in My Pocket | August 8, 2011 at 9:20 PM

I think the last lines are quite poetically said. I wouldn't change them! Your "poor English" is part of the charm of your writing, in my opinion.

Jessica Prescott | August 8, 2011 at 11:08 PM

Well, he didn't marry her because he loved her, so she acted more like a housekeeper. I think it's quite fitting. The last two lines really make the poem a fun read.

Neni | August 9, 2011 at 12:01 AM

@Marbles in My Pocket and Jessica Prescott: Thank you for such nice and encouraging words.

Btw, Please be informed, you now read the edited version... :)

Anonymous | August 9, 2011 at 8:01 PM

Replacing love with OCD?

Neni | August 9, 2011 at 8:50 PM

Booguloo: hmmm... maybe... :)
Thanks for stopping by

Morning | August 11, 2011 at 11:30 PM

marrying a housekeeper, wow.

you do have humor talent, glad to see you share!

Anonymous | August 13, 2011 at 8:56 AM

interesting piece. I look forward to the next one

The Cello Strings | August 21, 2011 at 6:12 AM

keep your humor talent alive.
thanks for sharing.

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