a poor girl who married a rich widower
the widower she did not love
for the will of her parents she could not reproach
in order to pay family debts
Wealthy widower had two children
When he was working, Lena would take care of them
On the fifth day, all servants were fired;
Lena said she could do it all:
taking care kids, home and everything
Increasingly, wealthy widower was in love
he thought he did not miscast a second wife
he always found his home was clean and neat, children are in a good care
though Lena was always fatigue and slept fast at night
It was three months the age of their marriage
wealthy widower somehow began to feel
he did not marry a second wife
but rather a housekeeper ...
*Linked in PurpleTreeHouse
Note:
Written in session of Reading Lights Writers' Circle (Saturday, 2 / 7), theme: Poverty as a lifestyle.
(The original piece was formerly written in Indonesian Language)
Written in session of Reading Lights Writers' Circle (Saturday, 2 / 7), theme: Poverty as a lifestyle.
(The original piece was formerly written in Indonesian Language)
11 comments:
what a tickle.
Thanks for sharing.
A sad but ambiguous piece. I was a little confused with your use of the word "miscast".
Lena clearly is a great benefit for him, his children and his home by being a good housekeeper. He however must learn to love and respect her!
I think it's about my poor English... :(
I'm thinking that I need to edit some words especially last two lines
The widower, however, tried to find a wife but Lena acted more as a housekeeper...
Thanks for stopping by and always giving me constructive comments... :)
I think the last lines are quite poetically said. I wouldn't change them! Your "poor English" is part of the charm of your writing, in my opinion.
Well, he didn't marry her because he loved her, so she acted more like a housekeeper. I think it's quite fitting. The last two lines really make the poem a fun read.
@Marbles in My Pocket and Jessica Prescott: Thank you for such nice and encouraging words.
Btw, Please be informed, you now read the edited version... :)
Replacing love with OCD?
Booguloo: hmmm... maybe... :)
Thanks for stopping by
marrying a housekeeper, wow.
you do have humor talent, glad to see you share!
interesting piece. I look forward to the next one
keep your humor talent alive.
thanks for sharing.
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